I think students should be taught about money at school. First of all, financial literacy is as important as school subjects. They should learn how to use money properly. Also, most parents do not want to talk about money with their children. As a result, some students have no chance to learn about money. Therefore, schools should give their students money education equally.
英作文例： I like going to the zoo because I like animals. Seeing lions and elephants is fun. Also, animal shows are interesting. I saw a monkey show when I went to the zoo. (33語）
I like living in a city better. I have two reasons. First, cities are convenient because there are a lot of shops. Second, cities are crowded so I am not sad. （31語）わたしは都会に住む方が好きです。理由が２つあります。最初の理由は、都市にはたくさんおお店があって便利だからです。ふたつ目は、混雑しているのでさみしくないからです。
I like going to the park with my friends. I have two reasons. First, we enjoy playing dodgeball in the park. Second, playing hide-and-seek is fun.（25語）わたしは友達と公園に行くのが好きです。理由が２つあります。最初の理由は、公園でドッジボールをすると楽しいからです。2つめは、かくれんぼが楽しいからです。
I agree with the idea that it is acceptable to keep animals in zoos because of the growing emphasis on endangered species and benefits to living conditions.To begin with, it is of crucial importance that we protect endangered species. It is often said that the number of endangered species continues to decrease these days because of the destruction of the environment and food shortage, and so on. Therefore, keeping endangered species in zoos is a good way.
In addtion, another benefit to keeping animals in zoos is that animals can get enough food to survive. If they are not kept in zoos, it is much more difficult to get a lot of food in today’s environment.
Taking the points mentioned above into consideration, keeping animals in zoos is extremely important in order to conserve endangered species and provide animals with good living conditions. (144 words)
I do not think keeping animals in zoos is acceptable. I have two reasons to support my opinion.First of all, it is obvious that keeping animals in zoos is a violation of animal rights. Animals are forced to live in a small cage and are being exposed to curious eyes of humans all the time. Some animals are trained to perform tricks in front of the audience. In other words, zoo animals are a part of the entertainment for humans.
Secondly, it is hard to say that zoos have contributed to the conservation of endangered species. Zoos can only protect limited kinds of animals such as big mammals. Most wild lives such as birds and insects have been ignored even if they are on the verge of extinction.
For the reasons above, we should not keep animals in zoos. (140語）
Some people might think that reading is not important in the digital age. However, I disagree with this idea for the reasons below.First of all, reading is the most efficient way to get information. The vast majority of information is in written form. Therefore, if you can read, you can access the information you need quickly and efficiently.
Also, you can develop many skills by reading. For example, reading improves concentration, imagination, and creativity. These skills can help you survive in the digital age.
For these reasons, I think reading is important in the digital age. (97 words)
I do not think reading is important in the digital age. There are two reasons why I feel this way.Firstly, due to the advancement of technology, people have fewer chances to read because they can access all the information they need by watching movies like on YouTube.
Also, digital devices such as cell phones and computers are able to read aloud the data for you. So all you have to do is to listen.
That is why I do not think people need to read in the digital age because of the advancement of technology and devices. (98 words)
TOPICDo you think the traditional craftwork industries can survive in modern society?
POINTS
・prices ・quality ・traditional skills ・tourism
Puppycatさんからいただいた英作文（原文そのまま）
I don’t think that the traditional craftwork industries can survive in modern society. I have two reasons for that.
Perhaps the greatest reason is that technology has advanced too far. People today are offered with various amenities with latest technology implemented with a reasonable price. However, the quality of the handicrafts is incomparable to them despite most of them are cheap.
Secondly, traditional skills are being forgotten when craftspeople are forced to live in cities due to their financial situation. Most of them would work in a company, so they find that their skills are trivial. As a result, they will not be passed onto the next generation, and fewer people will be able to use them as time passes by.
These are the reasons why I don’t think that the craftwork industries can thrive in modern society.
I don’t think that the traditional craftwork industries can survive in modern society. I have two reasons for that.
Perhaps the greatest reason is that technology has advanced too far. People today are offered with various amenities with latest technology implemented with a reasonable price. However, the quality of the handicrafts is incomparable to them despite most of them are cheap.（この部分を以下に書き換え↓）
Perhaps the greatest reason is that the modern companies have pursued the adoption of the latest technology for their production. The quality of mass-produced items has become comparable to that of handicrafts manufactured by artisans, but the prices are much lower. As a result, mass products have been gaining their competitiveness regarding both quality and prices.
Secondly, traditional skills are being forgotten when craftspeople are forced to live in cities due to their financial situation. Most of them would work in a company, so they find that their skills are trivial. As a result, they will not be passed onto the next generation, and fewer people will be able to use them as time passes by.（この部分を書き換え→）Consequently, their art and skills are being lost forever without being handed down to the next generation.
These are the reasons why I don’t think that the craftwork industries can thrive in modern society.
Some people are learning a second or a third foreign language in addition to English. Do you think more people will do so?POINTS
● job opportunities
● friends
● time and effort
今回は賛成の立場で、以下の理由を展開していきたいと思います。
１．Speaking several languages will increase your job opportunities.
（理由１：複数言語を話せると仕事のチャンスがアップする）
２．You can make new foreign friends easily.
（理由２：新しい外国人の友達が簡単にできる）
Firstly, speaking several languages will increase your job opportunities. For example, Chinese is widely spoken around the world. So if you are fluent in Chinese, you will get a well-paid job from the companies targeting the Chinese market.第1に、複数言語を話せると、仕事のチャンスが増えます。例えば、中国語は世界中で広く話されています。もしあなたが中国語を流暢に話せれば、中国市場をターゲットにしている会社から稼ぎの良い仕事を得ることができるでしょう。
Secondly, you can make new foreign friends easily. My sister is a good example of that. She speaks Korean. She has many Korean friends because she is able to communicate with them very well. If she could only speak English, she would not have such a lot of Korean friends.第2に、新しい外国人の友達が簡単に作れます。私の妹が良い例です。彼女は韓国語を話します。彼女は彼らととてもよくコミュニケーションが取れるので、多くの韓国人の友達がいます。彼女がもし英語しか話せなかったら、こんなにたくさんの韓国人の友達はいないでしょう。
I think more people will learn several foreign languages. There are two reasons why I think so.Firstly, speaking several languages will increase your job opportunities. For example, Chinese is widely spoken around the world. So if you are fluent in Chinese, you will get a well-paid job from the companies targeting the Chinese market.
Secondly, you can make new foreign friends easily. My sister is a good example of that. She speaks Korean. She has many Korean friends because she is able to communicate with them very well. If she could only speak English, she would not have such a lot of Korean friends.
For these reasons, more people will learn several foreign languages. (115語）
TOPICDo you think the traditional craftwork industries can survive in modern society?
POINTS
・prices ・quality ・traditional skills ・tourism
Blueさんにいただいたエッセイ（原文そのまま）
Although traditional craftworks industries have problems on lacking of sucsessors, I believe that traditional craftworks industries will survive in modern society. I have two reasons to support my opinion.
One reason is that the high quality of traditional craftworks is appreciated by many people. We can’t make such amazing quality by mass product. People continue to want traditional craftworks in the future.
Another reason is that traditional craftworks have many funs all over the world. Therefore, traditional craftworks is very popular tourism for foreign people. Reportedly,the number of foreign tourists who want to experience the unique skills of traditional craft works is increasing.
In conclusion, I agree with the idea that traditional craftworks industries will survive in modern societies because of the high quality and precious tourism resources.
(128 words)
添削結果
Although traditional craftworks industries have problems on lackinglack of sucsessorssuccessors, I believe that traditional craftworks industries will survive in modern society. I have two reasons to support my opinion.
One reason is that the high quality of traditional craftworks is appreciated by many people. We can’t make such amazing quality by mass productproduction. People will continue to want (love)traditional craftworks in the future.
Another reason is that traditional craftworks have many funsfansall over the world. Therefore, traditional craftworks is arevery popular tourism for foreign people. （下で解説）Reportedly, the number of foreign tourists who want to experience the unique skills of traditional craft works is increasing.
In conclusion, I agree with the idea that traditional craftworks industries will survive in modern societies because of the high quality and precious tourism resources.
